First Cut Feedback - Miss Spencer
This is an interesting film opening. You have a clear narrative, and many conventions of the genre. This includes groups of teenagers having a sleepover, candles, myths etc.
You have used a variety of shots and camera angles and thought about characterisation.
However the overall impression is stilted and lacks a good flow in the action.
In order to improve this I suggest you go through and create sound bridges where you cut to a different actor before they finish speaking. This will run some dialogue under different actors and allow you to run the conversation more smoothly.
Also add more cutaways throughout, this will also help with smooth running.
You should also import your opening graphic and get the titles done.
Think about sound, this will help to add tension.
Also get some feedback from peers and parents to help with your improvements.
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